Quote from TheCakeIsASpy on December 11, 2011, 7:42 am

A huge improvement over the first Chapter, [spoiler]the turret management scene was funny[/spoiler], but few things to do:

* The rooms are still kind of big and look like just Black&White without almost any details.
* It's too dark sometimes.
* [spoiler]After the turret scene, the wall just destroys itself. It's kinda weird. No gibs? No Explosion?[/spoiler]
* The textures were mis-alighning sometimes.
* The map is generally too easy and too short.

Not bad, but still improvements to do.

Quote from Lpfreaky90 on December 11, 2011, 10:55 am

I got stuck multiple times.
My brain hurts from big orange flashing lights.
I could see the thingies you used to turn that wall.
The floor/ceiling went through the wall and the player?
The arms in the final room aren't solid.
The scenes took to long, and if you're doing these kind of scenes, make sure they're properly voice-acted.
The textures were horribly misaligned.

Other than that it's quite ok, but it just needs a hell of a lot more work before it's a good map. I think that specially in a map that is about storyline the looks of the map are more important that in any other map!

Just my two cents!
For now 2/5.

Quote from BlackBird Studios on December 11, 2011, 12:56 pm

I thank you guys for downloading the map so fast, that really tells me that you guys were looking foward to Chapter 2. I am very sorry that it wasn't what you guys were looking foward to. When I made this map, I did the same from Chapter 1. I went along with what I had as I was making it, nothing was preplanned in the sense of image. Here I was teaching myself more on triggers than anything else along with functions. While I was making it everything that is in that map was meant to happen.
[spoiler]Those things you see that are floating from the movement of the wall, are explained from the turret after you drop down. I could have easily removed them and set them somewhere else. I kept them there to tell the player that something is watching the facility of Aperture and that those things aka "The Jammers", were placed there to block the signal of an unkown character, from being able to listen to what the turret had to say.[/spoiler] As for that moveable wall that gets the player stuck, I also knew that was going to be a problem, but I kept it in the way I wanted, before hand that wall was smacking things and actually froze my game. So I know what you are saying, but I wanted a better way to transition to the rest of the map by having one floor do 3 things. As for the lighting, it is the way I wanted it. I wanted it to feel undergroundish, in that you were in the old unforgotten parts of Aperture and as for the orange lights, I wanted it to give the player the sense of, "Get me out of this sh** hole". They acted as a annoying feature, which seemed to work... you don't like them, which was the point, if I were to add regular lights in there, it would loose interest and you would be able to see, making the temptation of the part of the map, crappy. So, I understand what you guys are saying, there are a lot of things wrong with that map, but I didn't want to spend to much time with that, just wanted to show a little part of the story and get you guys in the feel for my story. As stated in the description, this map is NOT HARD AT ALL, the first chamber of Portal 1 is harder then this map. But as stated, that is the point... I wanted to build more to this Chapter, but for some reason, this file became very laggy, and it got annoying to move around and add more blocks to make it even laggier. Chapter 3 will have more time put into it, I promise...

Thank you guys for commenting and I hope this has helped,

BlackBird Studios

Quote from andyb on December 11, 2011, 10:34 pm

Indicator lights 101 http://www.tophattwaffle.com/?p=2784

Quote from Djinndrache on December 12, 2011, 3:48 am

I'm playing custom maps and record my first time of playing them. So the run is not perfect and may not use only intended ways, but maybe it can let you see how other people may understand the map or you could just enjoy someone playing this map for entertainment.
Anyways, here is the recording:

DA_K6-NU2OY
(Link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DA_K6-NU2OY)

Also note the video description for more feedback and my signature for additional project information.

Quote from BlackBird Studios on December 12, 2011, 12:01 pm

This is why I knew this project of mine was going to be a bit faulty. People are so caught up with the wanting to complete the map they don't stop. That is why at first I thought to put a wall at the beginning and to destory it when the turret was done talking. This video proves what I was fearing might happen. People need to get the idea in their head that I am not the kind of person just to make a map and have it stop there. I go above and beyond and try to make an experience memorable. I'm not doing a very good job at it though. I'm going to neeed to make it so people aren't going to post videos of what I do just to skim past the thing. I'm not mad at you Djinndrache, and I know you clearly state that the run is not perfect, but that is because you usually do the videos for test chambers. If you are going to do my maps, please could you at least slow it down a bit, so there is not a wrong impression. Like I said, later in the future after I'm done with my mini-story I might just do single test chamber maps, but as for now, the maps that signify a chapter, are for the story. I find it amazing that you show people what other maps look like and you record the experience for the first time you do it, but for time, these maps aren't for that experience. I would still love to have you continue recording my maps, but be considerate and at least give me and my maps a chance to breathe.

Quote from Djinndrache on December 12, 2011, 12:06 pm

Sure, I'll slow the run down a little to get a better result for the video and the viewers.

To be honest I was bored in this map though. Nobody wants to read text-chats in Portal, it's not portal-style at all. There was always voice for Portal maps and even custom "story maps" use custom voice instead of text-chat.
Maybe you can go that way in future, maybe it's more interesting then.

As stated in the video description your map was too much "RPGMaker style" and too less "Portal style" for my taste. But I'm waiting for more to be done

Quote from BlackBird Studios on December 12, 2011, 7:02 pm

If I knew how to use custom voice, I might give it a try. But I do not, so I can not. Simple as that. Like I stated before, I knew that this thing was going to be a bit faulty, I understand why some people don't want to watch text fly across the screen, but that is for some people. As I mentioned, this is not a Portal Style thing I am trying to do, but I am trying as hard as I can to make it go together with Portal. If you know how I can make the talking more better, please by all means, tell me. I am always interested in learning how to do new things on hammer.

Quote from sicklebrick on December 14, 2011, 5:49 pm

Had fun with this one, the first 2 turrets gave me a good giggle

I think maybe if the text went a little faster though, and you had a trigger set in place to skip those the player could decide if they wanted to listen?
It's a pretty interesting design, but to be honest at times I did turn on the torch to ease my impatience :p

Oh, and a few bugs

[spoiler]The "you're fired" room:
I think I jumped back down the entrance shaft, and out of the sloped panel, in a loop to press the door opening button without using the one next to the pit... you can keep looping a bit until you hit the button.

Painty Hallway room:
I couldn't be bothered with the big spikey smasher, so I let some paint fall at the start of the hallway from the roof, jumped through and bounced back up to ceiling height, while in the air, I placed a portal nearby on the white surface, and one next to the door on the wall..
Fell through the nearby portal, and flew out onto the step.

Funnel room:
I still had an orange portal in the "lies" room, so I went back through and placed it under the blue paint.. then jumped back to the funnel room and painted stuff with the blue one.. quicker to get the cube!

Fire room:
You can place portals slightly underneath the big roof light. I got a bit stuck [/spoiler]